I've never recorded anything really, but when I do make music it's usually just me messing around on my acoustic guitar until I find some chord progressions and fills I like, and then I just play around with different structures and variations until all that I'm left with is an avant-garde mess. I'm really pretty ok at the guitar, I'm kind of disappointed it never went anywhere for me. I might get more into finger picking when I have more free time in the future, I think a lot of my problem was that despite having some skill at the practical side of playing, when it came to creating tones and producing I had a tin ear.>>31045
With poetry I think I can explain your problem. With a poem, there are specific structures and devices that you've used to put the emphasis and emotions where you want them to be. If you want to put that to music, the music has to enhance these emphases or at least compliment them. Otherwise, it's no wonder it doesn't sound right. I think writing lyrics is different to writing poetry, try separating the processes and you may have more success in setting words to music. Think of why the instrumentals behind spoken word songs behave the way that they do.